CK Lynn

FYI: Changed the title again, because I was looking in poetry and found like, six other poems called "dusk" so maybe that wasn't the best choice.

It was really interesting, and unique. Though perhaps you might break it up some more?

I really loved the first line, and the languague was great. I will say however, that the paranetheses in my opinion were really unnessecary and distracted from the piece as ...

No, there wasn't supposed to be any rhyme, it just sort of ended up fitting that way in some parts and I haven't changed it because all the other words ...

I liked it. THe first verse was good, but the others didn't tie in.

It was okay, though not very original

Yeah, I took out the caps, and edited some of the punctuation.

I liked it, good job on imagery. But you do need to break it up, perhaps into sesons.

Wow, I really liked it, especcially all the wonderful imagery and emotions. Two thing would make it better: 1. Abetter title (this one sounds like skinny-dipping, no offense) and 2. ...

Wow. It was ... intense. Perhaps to the point of being too much so. I like how you're kind of confused about it, not having much information, so there's tons ...

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It was okay. THere was nothing wrong with it, but I guess I just am not a fan of horror stories. You might consider a more discriptive title.

Um, creepy. You had a difinite voice, and I liked that. Your poem seemed to skip around, though, from death to truth to destruction (the end of truth?). Try to ...

Okay I changed the title, because Horizon was just something of a working title. I also added a word to the cliff part to say what I mean.